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©2007-2009 ~ElectroPueppi
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So finally the third page of my Doujinshi^^

My english sucks so if you see any mistake pleeeease let me know it :O

Shit I am so proud of the first pic^^ It looks just like a real manga picture o.O

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:iconprettyprincess890:
i think it`s good

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:iconcelestial-selene:
It's lovely! The first panel really does look like it came out of the manga, but the whole page seems to show a big improvement over your previous pages!

The only English mistake I caught was in the last panel, where Usagi says "Why I haven't told you this before?" There could be two ways to correct it, depending on what you want her meaning to be.

The first way to change it would be for it to read "Why haven't I told you this before?", switching the positions of the "I" and "haven't". This makes it sound like she's talking to him there, or like he's nearby.

The other way is to change more words and have it read "Why didn't I tell you that before?" and this statement makes it sound like she's regretting not having told him before he left.

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:iconelectropueppi:
o.O thx for the great advice and for the compliments=)
:iconetoile2109:
well done,it's beautiful!!!
:iconprettyprincess890:
welcome!! ^.^ V

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:iconseiyalover:
Oh so awsome. :clap: Runs and favs......

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:iconddddigital:
it's very well done! There are some grammatical errors, but I like the art and the plot so far! I want to see more!
:iconelectropueppi:
thx you =)
and where are the grammatical mistakes?

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